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The Photograph

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A memory of the past,
Lying on a table,
The color faded by time,
The edges burnt by life.

It's been neglected,
Left to soon be stored away,
Far in the back of the mind
And for new memories to take it's place.

When that memory of the past,
Time has finally come,
Picked up and carried away,
And lied in a box for a time being.

Memories do not know the test of time,
And when time comes for it,
A match will light,
And they will burn to ash.

For new memories to come,
Others must be wiped away,
The ashes will be washed away,
And new memories take their place.
This is the first poem I've wrote in a while and it feels like my old poetry writing. I like it actually, even though the flow isn't where I want it to be.

But my friends liked it also so here I am posting it.

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no bashing, critiques please be respectful in your comments thank you.
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Cimorine90
I cannot post a critique, but I can post a comment critique!

I think this is one of my favorite poems of yours. you seem to be living more up to your potential here. a pheonix-like theme for memories is an orriginal idea, and has great imagry. (that's what I thought of, anyway, at the last line). Your grammar is a little askew, but if you intended that, then it's ok. :) anything goes, really, in Poetry, so long as it's in the name of the theme or the wording or style. Great job on the poem. Don't worry about the flow. the more writing you do, the more flow will come. just focus on each poem, making sure you get it into the form you want. :) like a sculpture, a poem must be molded, refined, shaped, and redone until it is finished. and even then the elements are always affecting it. :) let that happen to your poems, and they will be beautiful, as this one is. Also, the flow can be honed in on and fixed as you write the poems. the more you write, the easier it will be to hone the flow